Thursday, August 9, 2012

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SCRIPT SAMPLE

Writing Action Sequences: Die Hard





Imagine you want to put a nice juicy action sequence into your film. Think about your favourite action sequence that you might want to replicate or make homage to. Now remove the music score that’s running through your head, the noisy sound effects rattling in the background, the beautiful camera angles which give the scene its zip, and the facial expressions of every actor. What you have left over from all that is all you have to work with when writing an action sequence in a screenplay.
Writing action is hard, Charlie’s Angels and Big Fish writer John August calls it “the most difficult and least rewarding things a screenwriter writes, but they’re essential to many movies.” Just how do you capture the essence of an explosion-filled chase sequence, being able to generate the same thrills gained in the cinema on an A4 sheet of white paper? Using the film Die Hard, a fantastic celebration of everything that can be great about the action film, we will try to find out.
The first thing that action scenes do is that they build suspense. The most awkward thing to watch is an action sequence in which there is no stakes, the worst example being 300 in which an army of Spartans win every single action sequence they take part in until suddenly losing in the final battle. At no point is there a feeling that those Spartans are actually going to lose. It’s important that in any action sequence, that we build suspense.
Building an action scene requires two important factors: what you tell your protagonist and what you tell your audience. When the audience knows what is about to happen and can see the solution to the conflict dangling in front of them, they will get bored. When there is a gap between the predicament that the characters find themselves in and the solution that will lead them to safety, only then are we interested.

Page 66:
OUTSIDE THE BUILDING - SAME TIME
Signs of activity along the edges and shadows of the area. Men and vehicles. The SNAP of weapons and breeches. Footsteps running in unison. Powell picks up on this, turns to Robinson, who is standing with the SWAT Captain, MITCHELL.

POWELL
What's going on?
ROBINSON
What's it look like? We're going in.

Every action scene needs a beginning, a set-up. Having finally realised that there are terrorists in the Nakatomi Plaza, the SWAT team strap up ready to attack. Because the penny has dropped halfway through the movie, and that we know exactly what the terrorists planned but the good guys don’t, we have a feeling that this is going to end in disaster…

Page 68:
MCCLANE
Al, what's wrong? Did something -- (realizing) -- Oh, God. You're coming in! That's it, isn't it? Christ, Powell, I told you what you're dealing with here –

…which is reinforced by the frantic shouting of McClane.

Pages 69-70:
THE VAULT DOOR
Kristoff DRILLS AWAY, is rewarded with the message FIFTH LOCK DEACTIVATED. DO YOU WISH TO CONTINUE? Nearby, Theo sits at a bank of monitors. Screen after screen pinpoints all the police activity outside, down to the last detail. Theo smiles. Suddenly we recognize that tune he's been whistling. It's "Singin' In The Rain."

THEO
(into a throat mike)
It was the night before Xmas, and all through the house, not a creature was stirring, expect for the four assholes coming in the rear in standard 2 X 2 cover formation.

INT. LOBBY – NIGHT
Eddie and another terrorist, ULI, take up prone firing positions, using the gaps in the steel partition like gunpoints.
ANGLE ON TWO SWAT OFFICERS
Mitchell and Robinson watch from behind the cover of a police car as the SWAT officers remove a portable welding torch and begin cutting their way through the locks.
INT. 33RD FLOOR – MCCLANE
He moves painfully to the window and looks out. He can't see a thing because of the lights.

Notice the cuts between McClane, the terrorists and the SWAT team? This is giving us the viewer some vital information. We now know that the terrorists are watching the SWAT on a TV screen, not even panicking, Theo indulging himself in song. They know something we don’t, and that makes us fear that the four SWAT guys are about to become toast.

Pages 70-71:
More shots ring out from the building going over the SWAT officers' heads and suddenly the huge dome of one of the spotlights shatters behind Mitchell and Robinson's head. The glow fades. A moment later the next light twenty feet away dies.
ROBINSON
They're going after the lights! The two SWAT officers cutting the garage ate suddenly look up as their cover starts to disappear.
ROBINSON (CONT'D)
Call them back.

MITCHELL
No, they're almost in.
Suddenly the third and fourth lights are shot out and the SWAT men become sitting ducks.
IN HOLLY'S OFFICE – HANS
He calmly speaks into his CB.

HANS
Don't get impatient. Just wound them.
INT. LOBBY
Eddie and Uli fire. They hit one of the officers in the leg, the second one in the arm.

The payoff of all this is that our worst fears are confirmed – the SWAT team are on the rack. Note that there is a sense of weakness and vulnerability that is reinforced in almost every paragraph. Their cover starts to disappear, and then they become sitting ducks entirely. Also notice the incompetence of the arrogant SWAT guy who demands they keep going; nothing gets us more wound up than someone doing something monumentally stupid. The guy in charge of the SWAT panics and decides to send in the cavalry in the form of the armoured car.

Page 72:
INT. 3RD FLOOR – SAME
The service elevator arrives on the 3rd floor and James and Alexander move across the room toward the windows with the anti-tank weapon. At the window, they prepare the weapon for use. Outside the window the armored car has stopped in front of the wounded man and paramedics quickly load them in from the sheltered side of the vehicle. Alexander quickly sights on the armored car.

ALEXANDER
(to Hans, CB)
I have them.
HANS' VOICE
(o.s., over CB)
Fire.

EXT. THE ARMORED CAR
A blast ROARS from the third floor window and the shell hits the armored car. The car pitches forward like a beast whose front legs have been shot out from under it -- its front axle destroyed, unable to move. Alexander looks back at James and grins.
(BREAK)

Page 73:
EXT. POLICE BARRICADE - ON ROBINSON AND MITCHELL
They look on in horror as the armored car sits helplessly on fire. On the police radio channel we hear the SCREAMS OF MEN inside.

The scene is continuing to build its suspense to a crescendo. The screams of good cops just doing their job is a powerful one, especially in contrast to a cold villain who matter of factly tells his henchman to “just wound them.” John McClane has been largely silent up until now, and it figures that this particular action scene will end with McClane coming up with an ingenious way of stopping the terrorists.
This is most common structure of an action scene, in which the hero or the protagonist of the scene makes an action which puts him into danger. Since the antagonist has to be smarter than the hero, often they find themselves in trouble quite quickly. Our perception of an action scene depends on what information we have that the hero doesn’t, and when we know there is a bad guy lurking round the corner, we start to become anxious for the safety of the good guy.

However, this previous scene had one thing most action scenes don’t have: dialogue. Most action scenes don’t have that crutch to hold onto. The biggest difficulty with writing an action scene is to strike a balance between brevity and depth. Going for the most concise description of the action scene will make it take up only a few lines, and could make what you envisage as a two minute scene last only a handful of seconds on paper. However, go into too much depth, too much description, and you are potentially telling both the director and the choreographer exactly what to do.

Returning to John August for a second, he makes the key point you have to consider when writing any kind of scene: “Always remember that you’re writing a movie, not a screenplay. Even though you only have words at your disposal, you’re trying to create the experience of watching a movie”
In other words, you have to paint a picture of the scene. In the previous scene, look at the description of the rocket hitting an armoured car. There are no specific camera angles mentioned and the description is fairly brief, but it still works to great effect: “A blast ROARS from the third floor window” The use of capital letters makes the word stick out on the page and catch the reader’s attention. “The car pitches forward like a beast whose front legs have been shot out from under it -- its front axle destroyed, unable to move.” A clear and emphatic picture of the action has been created to us, full of detail.

Wednesday, August 8, 2012

SCRIPT SAMPLE



 EXT.–BARABARANI-JIONI
Catty na rafiki yake Rose wanatembea barabarani kwa hatua za taratibu huku wakizungumza.
ROSE
Usinambie best,mama kafrahije?Maana alikuwa hapendi kabisa kujichanganya na watu wa uswahilini.Afu sijamuona kanisani!

CATTY
Wee acha mama yangu afrahi…kasema amechoka,nimemwacha bado kalala.

ROSE
(Anamgeukia rafiki yake)

Sipati picha maisha ndani ya mjengo mpya nini?

CATTY
Nyumba ni nzuri utakuja uione,pale pale mwambani kituoni wala huwezi kupotea. namshukuru Mungu kwa kweli,sikutegemea!

ROSE
(Anamgeukia rafiki yake)

Isije ikawa boss kakuzimia?

CATTY
Wee hamna hiyo… kwanza bosi wetu siye mwanamke.Wee njoo umuone mama,siku mbili tu ameanza kunenepa.

Rose anacheka,na kumgonga bega rafiki yake.Huku wakicheka wote wawili kwa pamoja wanageuka kuitazama gari inayopita,kisha wanaendelea.



ROSE
Bado siku chache tu tutakuona na wewe unadrive.

CATTY
(Anainua mabega kuonyesha inaweza kutokea)

Mungu akipenda, si unajua maskini haishiwi ndoto!

LONG SHOT:Gari ile ikiishiria kwa mbali.

CONTRACT SAMPLE

OPTION AGREEMENT FOR RIGHTS TO ORIGINAL SCREENPLAY
THIS AGREEMENT made effective as of the _____ day of ______________, _______.
BETWEEN:
[NAME OF PRODUCER/PRODUCTION COMPANY]
a body corporate incorporated under the laws of _______ / a partnership consisting of _____________
[revise to fit the circumstances]
(“Producer”)
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[NAME OF SCREENWRITER]
an individual resident in the City of ______, _______
(“Writer”)
THIS AGREEMENT WITNESSES that in consideration of the mutual covenants and agreements
contained in this Agreement and other good and valuable consideration, the receipt and sufficiency of
which is acknowledged, the parties agree as follows:
1. Grant of Option
Writer hereby grants to Producer the exclusive and irrevocable right and option to purchase from Writer
all motion picture, television, ancillary, exploitation and merchandising rights (“Rights”) to an original
screenplay written by Writer, entitled ”___________________________” (the “Work”).
2. Term of Option; Consideration
(a) The term of the option (“Option”) shall be for a period of ______ year(s) from the date of
execution of this Agreement.
(b) The Producer agrees to pay an option fee of $_____ within ___ business days of execution of this
agreement, which shall be applied against the Purchase Price.
(c) At any time prior to the expiration of the initial option period, Producer may extend the Option
for an additional period of _________ year(s) by written notice to Writer and upon payment to
Writer of an additional $________, which shall be applied against the Purchase Price (as
hereinafter defined).
(d) If Producer has obtained a development and/or production commitment, Producer or its
assignee shall have the right to further extend the Option for one additional period of ____
[month(s)/year], upon payment to Writer of an additional $__________.
3. Compensation
If Producer exercises its option or any extension thereof, it is agreed that:
(a) Writer shall grant to Producer the right to produce an original motion picture based on the Work,
including remakes and sequels, television motion picture and series rights, and 7,500 word
publication rights for advertisement, publicity and exploitation purposes.
(b) Producer or its assignee shall pay Writer a purchase price (“Purchase Price”) of
_____________________ DOLLARS ($______), or (___%)of the direct cost budget of the Picture,
with a floor of _____________________ DOLLARS ($______) and a ceiling of
_____________________ DOLLARS ($______). The term “direct cost budget” shall be deemed to
mean the final approved (and bonded, if a completion guarantor guarantees completion) “going
in” budget of the Picture, excluding all finance costs, interest charges, completion bond fees,
contingency amounts and deferments.
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(c) In addition to the aforesaid Purchase Price, Writer shall receive bonus compensation as follows:
(i) if a motion picture is produced based on the Work with a final production budget of
_____________________ DOLLARS ($______) or more, and if Writer receives sole or
shared screenplay credit, a bonus of _____________________ DOLLARS ($______) shall
be paid to Writer ____ days after the day that principal photography commences;
(ii) if a motion picture is produced based on the Work, and if Writer receives sole or shared
screenplay credit, and if the motion picture generates U.S. theatrical box office receipts of
_____________________ DOLLARS ($______) or more in the first year of theatrical
release, an additional bonus of _____________________ DOLLARS ($______) shall be paid
to Writer.
(d) For any sequel produced based on the Work, in whole or in part, Producer will pay Writer onehalf
(1/2) of the original compensation payable under sub-clauses (a) and (b) of this Section; and
for any remake produced based upon the Work, in whole or in part, Producer will pay Writer
one-third (1/3) of the original compensation under sub-clauses (b) and (c) of this Section. The
compensation described in sub-clause (b) shall be paid to Writer upon commencement of
principal photography of any such sequel or remake.
(e) For any television series produced based on the Work, Producer will pay Writer the following
royalties per initial production upon completion of production of each program:
______________________ DOLLARS ($_________________) up to 30 minutes;
______________________ DOLLARS ($_________________) over 30 minutes, but not more than 60
minutes;
______________________ DOLLARS ($_________________) over 60 minutes;
and in addition to the foregoing, one hundred percent (100%) of the applicable initial royalty
amount, as a buy-out of all royalty obligations, to be paid in equal installments over _____ reruns,
payable within _________ days after each such rerun, or subject to Writers Guild of America
(“WGA”) minimum, whichever is greater.
(f) Producer shall pay Writer a percentage participation of four (4%) percent of one hundred (100%)
percent of the net profits (including all allied rights and exploitation of ancillary markets) of each
motion picture and television program or series based on the Work if Writer receives sole
screenplay credit. If Writer receives shared credit, they shall receive two (2%) percent of one
hundred (100%) percent of the net profits. The net profits shall be defined in the same as the net
profit participation granted to Producer.
(g) If in Producer’s sole discretion, Producer decides to have the script rewritten, Writer will be
offered the first opportunity to be employed to do a rewrite for a flat fee of
______________________ DOLLARS ($______), which shall be full and complete compensation
for Writer. Producer shall have no obligation to employ Writer for any subsequent rewrites or
polishes. Any work created by Writer for such a rewrite shall be a work for hire and all rights to
Writer’s work shall be owned by Producer or its assigns.
(h) All the sums set forth as compensation in this Section are for the total amount of monies payable
by Producer. Unless Writer instructs Producer otherwise, sums shall be payable __________
(___%) percent to each Writer.
4. Representations and Warranties of Writer
Writer represents and warrants to Producer that:
(a) Writer has sole and exclusive ownership of all rights of every kind and character throughout the
world in and to the Work, free and clear of any liens, encumbrances, claims, or litigation, whether
pending or threatened;
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(b) the Work was written solely by and is original to Writer;
(c) neither the Work nor its exploitation will violate the rights to privacy or publicity of any person
or constitute defamation or libel against any person, or in any other way violate the rights of any
person whomsoever;
(d) Writer has not sold, transferred, optioned or otherwise disposed of the Rights;
(e) Writer has the full right and power to enter into and to perform this Agreement and to grant the
rights granted hereunder;
(f) the Work has not previously been exploited as a motion picture, television production, play, or
otherwise, and no rights have been granted to any third party to do so;
(g) Writer has not and will not do anything that might interfere with the grant of the Option to
Producer under this Agreement.
Writer hereby indemnifies Producer against any loss or damage (including reasonable attorney’s fees)
incurred by any reason of breach or claim of breach of the foregoing representations and warranties. The
term “person” as used herein shall mean any person, firm, corporation or other entity.
5. Rights Acquired and Reserved
(a) The Option granted hereunder covers the sole, exclusive, perpetual, and worldwide motion
picture, television and allied and incidental rights in the Work and any and all screenplays or
other adaptations thereof, whether heretofore or hereafter written by Writer or any other person,
including theatrical, television (whether filmed, taped, or otherwise recorded, and including
series rights), cassette and other compact devices, sequel, remake, and advertising rights
(including 7,500 word synopsis publication rights); all rights to exploit, distribute and exhibit any
motion picture or other production produced hereunder in all media now known or hereafter
devised; all rights to make any and all changes to and adaptations of the Work; merchandising,
soundtrack, music publishing, and exploitation of the rights granted hereunder; and all other
rights customarily obtained in connection with formal literary purchase agreements.
(b) Producer hereby acknowledges that Writer reserves live television, radio, book publication, and
legitimate stage rights, subject to Producer’s customary limited advertising and promotion rights.
(c) Writer will not exercise or dispose of, or permit the exercise or disposition of such reserved rights
for a period of _____ (___) years after the release of the first motion picture based on the Work, or
____ (___) years from the date on which Producer exercises its option, whichever first occurs.
THIS IS AN 11-PAGE DOCUMENT.
Haijalishi uko mbali kiasi gani,ama una uwezo kiasi gani sisi tuko hapa kukuhudumia kuifanya filamu yako iwe ya kisasa kuanzia kwenye wazo lenyewe mpaka script.Usipoteze wakati kufanya filamu zinazokubalika sokoni wasiliana nasi sasa.
  
      Ikiwa unataka kujifunza uandishi wa script ama unataka kukuza wazo lako la filamu,usichelewe tutaitimiza ndoto yako na kukufanya utembee kifua mbele.

Tuesday, August 7, 2012

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